This poem was inspired by reading a lovely poem by Jay Maria Simpson called The Silent Vision. Jay has kindly allowed me to link back to it.
20th May 2023. StoryStars story of the day!
Watch the moon, does he smile
Will he hold your heart a while?
Take the pain, hold it tight
Diffuse it through his pale moonlight
But dawn will come and all reborn
My heart returned to be forlorn
My memories also will renew
And I can see the face of you..
Bitter tears, so well remembered
Bitter love so well dismembered
Torn apart, ravaged and spurned
But oh so deeply I have yearned
I curse the dawn and miss the night
Look for oblivion in cold moonlight
But dawn colours the sky in autumnal hue
And I can taste the scent of you..
The rising sun will bring no heat
It brings the taste of bittersweet
It’s rays of gold darken my heart
It’s shadows a perfect counterpart
For how can I welcome the day
My life just mournful shades of grey
On the roses glistens morning dew
Memories of the tears I cried for you
I absolutely adore the rhythm of this poem. It has a very musical, soothing feeling despite being a poem of “bitter love” and “bitter tears.” There’s something about “oblivion in cold moonlight” that feels synonymous with heartbreak and you’ve captured it perfectly. I really love it.
Thanks Bridgette for looking! It’s good of you, thanks for your lovely feedback !
Beautiful!
Definately!
Hi tallisman That was Jay above. I don’t know why I came up as anonymous! It’d be fun – we could either go line for line or maybe verse by verse. What do you think and how would we get started???? Jay
Thanks tallisman. Maybe we should attempt to write a poem together – line for line maybe???